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"See there?" A gloved finger extended upwards towards the sky, as if trying to poke it's infinite black depths; an impossible task. Amongst millions of winking white jewels sprawled against the dark curtain of night, there was only one being pointed at. To many other stargazers, that one dot might seem like....well, just a dot. Not to this particular observer though. "That's my home. Irk." Zim explained, returning his hand to it's original spot at his side. Dib nodded, hanging off of each word and letter that flowed from the other's mouth. On an ordinary Thursday night, the two adversaries would most likely be engaged in a ruthless battle, but not today. You see, even engrossed enemies such as this Irken/human duo need a break once in a while, and they preferred to spend their time staring at the sky once the sunlight had made itself scarce. It was the one time they could finally burry the hatchet before having to dig it up come next morn.
"What's it like flying up there?" The pale skinned one asked, pulling his coat tighter around himself to help somewhat shield himself from the frosty air biting through his clothes.
"Kind of boring actually." Zim replied with a slightly sly smile. He knew that deep down, he was amazed each time the sparkling tail of a comet happened to cross his path as he floated around in space. It just never seemed to get old. Dib glanced over at him with a spark of curiosity in his eyes.
"Really? Would you take me with you some time?" He asked as feelings of hope and excitement stirred in his belly. The other simply chuckled and placed his hands behind his head, not even giving the human a second look.
"In your dreams, pig smelly. Don't think I could trust you." Dib crossed his arms in disappointment. He found being turned down for an opportunity like this a bitter pill to swallow.
"I hate you." The boy mumbled and turned his attention back at the taunting stars. This only made Zim's grin grow wider.
"I know Dib-stink. I know."
Not really a ZaDr story, I know.
More like a ZaDe or possibly a ZaDf, but meh. :iconshrugsplz:
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Niao-GIW Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very nice story! I love your word choice, and you've got these two perfectly in character! The only advise I would have is that you broke tense unexpectedly with the "You see," and that kind of jarred me out of the moment. ^^ Your sentences are very well crafted, though. :)
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In-Love-With-ZaDr Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013
Really? Why, thank you! I was honestly worried about that since I've never written any roleplays or stories about Keef, and have hardly read any. I also do understand your confusion with that line, although I meant it to be Zim speaking to the reader rather than the story implying that the reader was a part of the plot. Thank you so much for the advice though! I now know to look out for that in my writing. I do tend to have a difficulty with keeping the tense in line after all. I am truly flattered by your compliments and am greatful for the slight bit of constructive critism! Thank you so much! I love to read replies like this so I am over-joyed by your comment. :D
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Zap-That-ZaDr Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
<3 <3 <3 <3 so cute of them being nice to each other <3 <3
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In-Love-With-ZaDr Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013
Hee hee hee, thank you! ^.^
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Zap-That-ZaDr Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome ! You're art is awesome
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In-Love-With-ZaDr Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013
I disagree but thank you! :)
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Zap-That-ZaDr Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome ! and you're are is awesome
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IZcrazy Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is just adorable not sex crazed, not " I'm going to kill you" its just a beautiful mix of acceptance and hatred, well done friend!
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In-Love-With-ZaDr Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
Aww, thank you so much! I really appriciate that! :D
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Art---Freak Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
its nice, just need to work on showing your self more in the words . Put a little of your self in it ! Its great and i mean that but, i feel like im reading a kids story.. but other than that its awesome! keep going you'll find your self getting better and better ! you doing great keep up the good work ! you might even, get into a good school. take a good English class of extra study, it will help ! and don't shrug its bad for your back !
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